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DanaBoBana, March 14th, 2010, 1:27 pm

As all of you know, I've been rushing to get these pages done. I haven't had any time to think the dialogue all the way through. This page was really awkward for me to draw and write out, and just doesn't seem natural at all ;n;

But I wanted to ask everyone... is there anything about the story you guys are confused about? Or anything that you would like me to clarify on? A few things in the story will be explained later, but if there's something that you think is a bit off, and doesn't make sense to you, ask away! And of course, I feel like the way I word things is a little awkward too, so if you can think of anything better to replace the dialogue with, I'm open to suggestions!

Thanks guys! ^_^ <3

Firanda, March 14th, 2010, 1:38 pm

This page is awesome!! ^_^ I think there isn't any problem with it and I don't find anything confusing in the story! Do your best!! :)

SunshineMoonlight, March 14th, 2010, 2:40 pm

Hehe they are very cute... :)
What if she got a crush on him? (I know it's not true, it's just a thought ) ^^

Nieknique, March 14th, 2010, 2:41 pm

omgosh, first panel, so cute!

and no, nothing difficult at all!

youre doing a great job! :D

BK_1/VGKid, March 14th, 2010, 2:53 pm

lol nope nothing seems to be clarified for me XD

chibigirl1370, March 14th, 2010, 3:32 pm

don't blush like that jacob. makes me think that you might like her or something. O.o
and i feel pretty clear on everything.
i think you're doing a great job at telling the story dana. ^^

Afrohawkman, March 14th, 2010, 4:00 pm

Well of course this would be awkward to draw and write, it's an awkward situation! xD Really though, it's quite good and consistent with the characters' development we've seen so far so I think you're doing good!

And I don't think there's anything too confusing out there. This is one of the few comics that has a lot of pages but I still understand what's going on. That's pretty rare for me :3

Kiiroi, March 14th, 2010, 5:23 pm

yeah, don't blush =(

but they are cute together :O

BakaMonMon, March 14th, 2010, 6:48 pm

yay for friends!! :3

lazy_kitsune, February 5th, 2011, 10:23 am

Jake's reactions are soooo adorable! He's so shy, it's cute!! <3<3<3

gurlrocker20, March 4th, 2013, 8:02 pm

I want Melany's blouse! It's so adorable!

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